12 Degrees & Skiving

what began as year-long challenge has become perpetual until further notice

exhale, hours

A mix-and-mash poem experiment, interchanging each line from the first and second stanza to create a third. This form has a name – it’s a similar form to others I’ve explore in the one-poetic-form-a-week challenge…but I’m at a loss for it’s name. Can anyone help me out?

exhale
ensigns of the day
breath unfurls tongues
sails into the morning
where myopic fairness lingers
extends jaws that click just out
of reach
of entropy

hours
are a line of fatigued lillies
a drawling dirge against the eye
seeking wideness, water
to hedge bets against the lap-slop
of river bank
called from a barque

exhale, hours
a line of fatigued lillies
ensigns of the day
breath unfurls tongues
drawling a dirge against the eye
sails into the morning
seeking wideness, water
where myopic fairness lingers
to hedge bets against the lap-slop
of extended jaws that click
just out from the river bank
called from a barque
of entropy

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2 comments on “exhale, hours

  1. aishasoasis
    June 20, 2014

    This is a really interesting poetic experiment, I like it alot! I dont know the name of this form, but you did a great job with it!
    also,
    Congratulations! I have awarded you with the Wonderful Team Member Readership Award! Please come to the award party I am throwing in your honor at https://aishasoasis.wordpress.com/2014/06/20/edenkeeper-article-egypt-illuminates-ancient-alleyways-with-solar-lights/
    see you there! ;^)

    • Kittykatmandoo
      June 20, 2014

      Thank you so much, Aisha, for the award and for reading 😉

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